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Thursday, September 22, 2011

Imago

      Here is the second challenge for the Writers Platform-Builder Campaign. You can check out
Rachael's  site and find out more about it.

     Anyway, here is my bit of micro fiction called: Imago


Kevin moved through the swamp. A stinking miasma prevented him from getting his bearings. This isn’t what had come to mind when he decided to save the world. He was a research scientist, not an adventurer. Instead of trying to overdose a monster-sized mosquito with Opium-Oscitate he should be home preening in front of a mirror for his Saturday night date.

           Something buzzed behind him.

Kevin spun around. He thought he saw a swirling of the mist.

            As spooky as this was it seemed safer than facing the small army of slaves back in town. Who’d have thought that a bug could spread a disease which would create a synchronicity among humans to defend the monster?  

            No one. But he should have.

            Movement registered out of the corner of Kevin’s eye. He turned and took aim. The dart gun accidentally discharged.      

            Kevin fumbled with the reloads in his pouch. 

            A sonorous droning filled his ears followed by a stabbing pain at the base of his neck. That would the immature larvae being inserted into the lacuna.

             As the pain subsided so did his fear. Why had he dreaded this? Now he would be part of a like-minded community. How wonderful.

32 comments:

  1. Oo, I really like this. The chilling ending is like cherry on a cake - perfect. Great usage of the words.
    Well done!

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  2. Creepy change of the MC's perspective as he succumbs to the 'disease'....Oy! ~ Nadja

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  3. I got to the end and wanted to scream "Nooooo!" but, alas, too late. Very good job. I enjoyed this very much.

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  4. I love that he's questioning saving the world. Mine is #29

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  5. Yikes! That seriously had me jump for a second. Yuck. Getting bit in the neck. Implantation? Even worse! Gross! And yet, I like it!

    Great job, Randy! :)

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  6. That is one creepy ending. I like it! I like it lots.

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  7. Creepy stuff! Wow! Also, I love how you got "oscitate" in there. Great job, and great ending!
    Mine is #3.

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  8. "trying to overdose a monster-sized mosquito with Opium-Oscitate"

    Love your use of oscitate in this line.

    Heading over to Like your story even though I love it!

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  9. Yikes! Gosh, this reminded me of the Animorphs.

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  10. Excellent! I loved the tension and the creepy factor. Too bad the bug got him in the end, though!

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  11. Yes, It's good. A great one for the twilight zone. Have you seen Invasion? Reminds me of it. I'm heading out to like it.

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  12. Where can I get some Opium-Oscitate?? LOL Love it! Very fun! Sci-fi meet Whimsy LOL

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  13. Excellent and great use of the words. And written so quickly too, very impressive. I haven't even started!
    I’m delighted to award you The Versatile Blogger Award: http://clairehennessy.blogspot.com/
    Have a great day :)

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  14. Decided that joining the ranks wasn't so bad, huh? I felt the tension and the resolution. Nice job! I'm #34.

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  15. Oh, how bizarre! Very neat story.

    The Write Soil

    My entry is #50.

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  16. That was a great piece. Creepy and strange, and still with enough mystery. Good job!

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  17. I feel bad for Kevin. Great flash fiction.

    Enjoy your weekend.

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  18. Why am I thinking his troubles are just getting started...? Nice job;-)

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  19. Enjoyed your story, Randy. Something tells me this guy should have invested in a big can of Raid!

    The Paranoid Blogger. (Are you following me?)

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  20. I like it, like someone above me said, it feels like something from the twilight zone. Nice job. Very creepy.

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  21. Creepy but well done. Great take on the challenge.

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  22. Good flash fiction. Frightening ending, but you led up to it beautrifully!
    Mine is 128 if you want to have a look.

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  23. Ooh, nice! I like the flip at the end.

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  24. Thank you for the nightmares I will have tonight about giant bugs laying larvae inside me. ;) Love the ending.

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  25. Wonderful word weave of the required words, and beyond that, a chilling little spooky halloweenie micro fiction.

    Great job!!

    #188

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  26. Ah, so creepy. Thanks for magnifying my fears of creepy crawlies. lol

    #189

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