Today is
Friday and not just any old end of the work week day, but the one that I
promised to launch my serialized story. That’s right, this is the premiere
edition of Fiction Friday.
There was a
tie in voting. One for “High” School and another vote for Swim Day.
Even though the post-apocalyptic story of Swim Day is normal fare for me I
decided to go with the YA tale of a spunky teenager caught in the middle of the
war on drugs. I haven’t tried to do YA before so please feel free to point out
to me when I make a mistake.
Hope you
enjoy the fiction and if you do – Please tell your friends.
“HIGH” SCHOOL
SCENE ONE
“When is
the school going to get serious about the war on drugs?” Jackie leaned back and
watched Principal Skinner respond to the question. A notepad sat in her lap and
she held a mechanical pencil in her hand, ready to jot down whatever he said
during the interview.
“The school
is serious about student involvement with drugs.” Skinner clasped his hands
together as if performing for an audience. Either that or it was one of those
well practiced responses that he threw out when required. “We have always taken
the war on drugs seriously. All you have to do is look at the programs we offer
to combat the threat to the younger generation.”
Jackie
scribbled his reply along with a comment about him giving a canned response.
She could already tell that this was going to be her best piece yet. Hard
hitting. Investigative. Relevant. She was so focused on the success of the
article that she barely heard Principal Skinner interject his own line of
inquiry.
“Now,
Jackie. Is it really necessary to pursue this topic with such vigor? After all,
it’s only a high school newspaper. I can tell you all about the band we have
lined up for the Spring Blowout. Or how about the new cheerleader uniforms that
are on order?”
“That’s kid
stuff. Teenagers are the future leaders of the world. We need to take an
interest in the problems that surround us or how else can we be expected to
solve them?”
“Fair
enough,” said Skinner. He offered a smile, but it looked forced. “Go ahead and
ask your next question.”
Jackie sat
up straighter and looked Principal Skinner square in the eyes, just as she had
seen her favorite movie character do. Lena Holmes would have been proud of how
she delivered the brow-buster question. At least, she would have if she really
existed.
“How can you account for your
failure to curb drug abuse on campus?”
Principal Skinner’s face grew tight
– and red. With measured moves he stood up and straightened his suit jacket.
Only after a considerable pause, while the color returned to his face, did he
speak.
“How familiar is Mr. Lee with your
journalistic efforts?”
“I talk to him about it every day.
Why?”
“Perhaps it’s time for the school
paper to make a few changes and let some of the other students try their hand
at reporting. It would be a shame for anyone to miss out on the opportunity to
see for themselves if this is a career they would like to pursue once they
graduate.”
Adults
over-reacted all the time, but this seemed ridiculous even for Principal
Skinner. Besides, he was probably just hoping to distract her with the threat
so she’d give up on the current line of investigation. It was about time that
he learned that Jackie Romano played hard ball.
“You
haven’t answered my last question yet.” Jackie stood as well.
Principal
Skinner paused before the door and turned just enough show a wicked smile on
his face. “Oh, no! I believe that your last question as a reporter is - What will
I do next?”
I enjoyed this very much. Young, investigative reporter in the making, tacking a serious issue with a principal not to keen on her line of questioning, and a bit of power happiness.
ReplyDeleteMy one suggestion would be to set the scene at the beginning. You have the op to do so when you have Jacking lean back. You describe her leaning back in a hard wooden chair meant to make kids squirm in the principal's office. Mr. Skinner, perhaps, can appear regal in his high back leather chair with his accolades and degrees on display behind him like a peacock. That way the reader immediately picture the two of them in his office...
Just a thought...
Excellent suggestion. I'm afraid that last week was a bit hectic for me and I rushed the story a bit. I will definately work on making sure the upcoming scenes do a better job with adding description.
DeleteThanks.
I liked this opening, Randy! I got a good feel for who Jackie is - tough,smart, determined - all qualities I'm sure she's going to need! My only suggestion has to do with the Principal. If he feels guilty about how he's handling the war on drugs, or if he's actually not doing anything about it, or he has something to hide, I don't think he'd let a high-schooler talk to him quite this way, but i also think he'd be ready with some kind of smooth brush-off - no getting red-faced and being so obvious. I think he'd be more subtle. But that's just me. I'm looking forward to the next installment!
ReplyDeleteThank you for the suggestions. I need to sit down and work out the characters better. Now that I know which of the stories I will be writing I should be able to do that and hopefully the upcoming scenes will be better.
DeleteThanks for the input.